MH Fanfiction [Ch. 37 is out]

I think niarty wants that the other people aka him, me, and any other
person (faithful reader) to keep appearing on your story.

By the way, your character link is from someone here or a
fictional one you made? just curiosity

I'm referring to Zedept's two love interests. I hope you have something planned for Link.

I based my hunter, Link, on Link from OoT. I then volunteered my hunter for Forte's story.

ohh

well then niart, if u want a love inerest i'll c what i can do, u guys have to remember that the story happens as i type and i didnt think about love interests until i was trying to figure out how to add some drama in it, and now since the 4th member is now in the group, i'll do the chapter that tells u all the group's name soon, i really need to start typing more chapters, i've slowed down quite a bit lately.

if you need help or ideas, you can ask us, you got yourself
a team of hunters here

thanks for the assistance but i do have some ideas on how some of these future chapters are going to be like, and i just released Ch. 16.

well, now you added the big four of UMH3

The slow realtionship with the new kid is beginning and the characters
getting to know his abilities, quite good, and I see Zedept being kinda
harsh, but oh well, things have their flow.

the team in peril of my beloved monster had a detailed and good
description of each of them and let´s see how the eight of them
manage this path.

btw i did read lol jusrt so you know and i even commented on the comments after, which i'll say one thing again, crazytrain, you're 14, and um a new hunter shouldnt you be focused on being a fighter, not a lover? lolol but I'm sure Forte has an arsenal of women, um girls out there crushin after Link since he was sooooooooo super in the test, i mean beating the great jaggi who is too rough for new hunters and all lol.

i'm loving this story more and more Forte. And it's so cute that Zedept has no idea what to think of the girls both liking him. Hmmm i'm guessing they havent told each other that they each have kissed him since they are still getting along so well LOL

and that evil black haired guy has got a whoopin comin i can just tell....

@Kristis
they will play a minor to major role in the story but that wont be until later, and with Zedept being harsh to Link, think about it as a student/teacher to a big bro/little bro thing, for now.

i wasnt sure on how the gang meets them so i went with that.

@Lyra
i get email alerts about the comment/reviews/favorites for my stories and i read it and i was going to pm u that u should put that on here but u already did so yea, as for the girls not knowing about each other kissing him, they'll find out later but not for a while, and i may give Link a love interest but not too sure about that yet, and im sure that he became the most popular guy in his class after hunting a Great Jaggi solo.

after i release the final chapter, i'm going to post all the hard work i did b4 i started typing the story, that includes character bio's, complete monster list, Area names, etc.

so be preapred for a big post and dont worry, i'm going to do that spoiler thing so it wont automaticly be big.

just so ppl wont be confused, Garetaten is going to look like the online city for Tri so u'll get the idea on it's look

allright

even though ive just released Ch. 16 here is Ch. 17.

it took me 11+ hours to type it so no more new ones for a while

and for those that cant piture what Shikaiza looks like, heres the link
http://picasaweb.google.com/lh/photo/4I7TOSDtBXTTsTLN4JgENh9RXaTnNg2EERkLQGzsxgE
its pretty much this look

Enjoy and review here.

Well, indeed a good work, some shocking news, an interesting
battle and upgraded stuff. I´m gald you made a deep part of the battle and enjoyable conversations.(trying to make a non-spoiler review)

I´d say you are making even better chapters with progress

I agree with Kristia, they are getting better, but..and i'm not picking on you, you were getting tired towards the end I could tell because a bit of the spelling and grammer had some mistakes....not that i really care, but you said before that other people gave you some complaints. (i read right over stuff like that because everyone talks differently and no one is perfect...sorry you grammar nazis out there)
the story is getting really good and now i'm trying to read them as soon as you get them out

Fixed the typos i saw.

Remember when i typed "Let's just hope we don't run into it while we're there. There's no way we can stand a chance against it with our current weapons.", the "it" was Jhen, if u havent figured that out yet and adding The Creators to the battle actually made it easier to type the battle.

As far the chapters getting better, it's normal for the chapters to get better as the stories continue.

Im going to be nice, in the next chapter, Zedept and Lyra returns to their village and Zedept learns a secret.

will it be that they are relatives?
will it be that qurupecos can talk?
or will it be that it was all a dream?

I´ll keep having random ideas

lets just say that it will surprise Zedept more than it was a surpreise to Lyra, Raylin and Link that Zedept was a member of The Creators.

and Zedept i said i had no trouble reading it, i juust saw some things maybe others might want u to "correctly grammerize" i dont care, i was complimenting you on how much better your story is evovling also, you've had some really good ideas and it just keeps getting better, please dont take what i said the wrong way...it's really been enjoyable to read

im not taking it the wrong way, its a good thing that u said something about the typos cause i wouldve missed them until i took a look at it and sometime when i type, my keys stick and they wont type even though they go down.

ok, even though i said that there wasnt going to be any new ones for a while i got bored so i typed the new chapter.

Enjoy and dont forget to review (havent got one from you Ray200 in a while, i dont care that u dont like to review but since ur one of the mains, it good to get ur opinion about it)

well... it was kinda too fast, I understand the origin part, but it was
like no emotion at all, like "here take it, go now".

Thats what I felt, a too.. rushed chapter >.>

idk if it was rushed, and im not sure how much else he could have added, maybe more of the story of Zedept's birth, and i would think that possibly there could have been more of a village involvement wt the remembrance of the death of their great hunter, but it really wasnt necessary. although wt the news of the secret...you could have added more of why that was so upsetting, but i liked it, it did seem like more of an informational chapter...i hope you plan to involve more of Zedept's origin into the story as we go on...like why he is so different from the people of Lyra's village or if being a chosen sacrifice has any part to the rest of the story

anyways i dont see anything wrong with the way you told it, and i'm looking forward to more

Lyra is actually right, it was an information chapter so nothing really too major happened. This chapter really wasn't rushed, it still took me a few hours to type it like the others (well minus 17 since that one took me 11+ hours to type but normally takes me 3-5 hours to type a chapter). I'm sure that the secret is something none of u suspected.

@Krisita
What do u mean there was no emotion in it? i was getting teary eyes when i was typing the grave scene (Lyra's part), so dont tell me there wasnt any emotion in it.

@Lyra
About the more details of Zedept's birth, remember that it was a notebook entry so it wasnt supposed to be really detailed. I'll try to do a memory chapter that explains why Zedept is different from the other people so dont worry about that too much. As for the sacrifce thing, i did mention that every few years that a new born baby has to be sacrifced so hopefully that was enough and if it wasnt, i do apologize about that, trying to keep some stuff for later.

Well that's it for now.

i thought that the sacrifice thing would be explained more later, lol and Forte you're such a softy lol you've let it slip out